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Submitted: April 28, 2009
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i finished my very first truly hentai picture ever for a commission...

no it wasn't about that subject....you know the one^^

anyways i can't upload it here in DA for abvious reasons so i did a very quick Etna picture

hope you like her^^

soon the pic will be on my website so keep it in mind^^

Critique by ~ryusuke Apr 29, 2009, 4:32:39 AM

Overall, it's a cute and sexy picture, which fits the character, but the size and proportions of her body makes her look more child-like than the actual character (which will lead some to calling this loli). Etna's flat chested, but she still has a more mature body (or as close to mature body as you get with that design style). More importantly, however, I don't get the sense of an underlying structure to her body. She's just marshmallowy forms arranged in the shape of a person. Also, since there is no background, and we don't see her feet, she seems floaty, as if she's not in a physical world, and that creates this weightlessness to her.
You have very clean lines, smooth coloring, and a decent design sense, so I know you know your tools well (and is why I watch you), but if you worked on the structure of your characters and gave them weight (even loli's have weight) I think your characters will look more alive on the page.
I'm not sure if you're self taught, or if you've gone to school, or are going, but I find that no amount of life drawing is enough.
I hope this helps... I don't do a lot of critiques, but I think it's important and so I'll try.

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