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My first real manga was taken down BY for having inappropriate ...ummmm....stuff in it T.T
but i remember that i also have a version that was never meant to be posted but it did take me a lot of work and it would be a shame to just lock it up in my computer so here ya go...
THE VERY FIRST VERSION OF MY MANGA
yup as you can see it was very different from my official one.. Ari wasn't alone at all she was living in a home with a lot of other older girls and well.......i just didn't like it... it just didn't give any sadness to Ari and her past, also it didn't make ARI the focus of the damn manga... more attention was payed for the other girls in the house...
so i had to change it and Make Ari a lonely little girl that doesn't have and doesn't want anybody else other than REM, so for that I'm glad i didn't finish this one.
another thing as you can see is the DREAM was much shorter which was good in some points but it made their over all relationship to vague. i needed to show how Ari feels about REM and that she doesn't mind throwing her self at him, but the whole giving her a sketch book as a journal part..i kind of miss it.. might add it later in the story.
the art style was also very different... the eyes and hair most of all.. i wasn't happy with my level and even in the official manga i wasn't happy with the style either so i'll change and make it better as i go along.. hopefully making manga after manga will improve all my art skillz....we'll see.
anyways let me know how you feel about this version
and of course enjoy^^
My first real manga was taken down BY for having inappropriate ...ummmm....stuff in it T.T
but i remember that i also have a version that was never meant to be posted but it did take me a lot of work and it would be a shame to just lock it up in my computer so here ya go...
THE VERY FIRST VERSION OF MY MANGA
yup as you can see it was very different from my official one.. Ari wasn't alone at all she was living in a home with a lot of other older girls and well.......i just didn't like it... it just didn't give any sadness to Ari and her past, also it didn't make ARI the focus of the damn manga... more attention was payed for the other girls in the house...
so i had to change it and Make Ari a lonely little girl that doesn't have and doesn't want anybody else other than REM, so for that I'm glad i didn't finish this one.
another thing as you can see is the DREAM was much shorter which was good in some points but it made their over all relationship to vague. i needed to show how Ari feels about REM and that she doesn't mind throwing her self at him, but the whole giving her a sketch book as a journal part..i kind of miss it.. might add it later in the story.
the art style was also very different... the eyes and hair most of all.. i wasn't happy with my level and even in the official manga i wasn't happy with the style either so i'll change and make it better as i go along.. hopefully making manga after manga will improve all my art skillz....we'll see.
anyways let me know how you feel about this version
and of course enjoy^^
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