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yup its back!!!

LET IT LOAD!!!

this was my very first real manga i posted here but it was taken down for various reasons.

it would be a real shame not to put this back up seeing how it took a lot of effort and work from my part.

so i have decided to edit it and censor it for you innocent DA users^^

no other changes were made so misspelling are still abundant.. sorry about that.

i would also like to mention that the next chapter will be a bit different and I'll be making some updates to the art and character design so don't be scared if the art changes^^;

PLEASE READ IT ALL and tell me what you think... again ^^
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Critique by Psycho-Schematics May 6, 2010, 7:50:53 PM
I can tell from what I've read from this you have it planned out down to the wire, the final page of the manga makes me wonder what's going to happen next between Ari and Avril. The fact that you put time into this to make the comic format like an ancutal japanese manga is a good start practice makes perfect and as far as I know I can't spot any flaws but someone else might find it for me(if there are any flaws)this is my very first time critisizing anything so keep up with the good work and I hope your manga is published one day
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hecvillanueva Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2014
Me gusta mucho tu dibujo, No hay forma que me des un curso... Tambien dibujo, pero no es tan dinámico y es muy cuadrado.
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aquakitty101 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
WHATTTTTTTTTTTTTB THIS IS YOUR FIRST MANGAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA
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esaiXD Featured By Owner May 2, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
funny some of the teachers remind me of the ones from kodomo no jikan  other than that it had its funny moments but the story is a bit sad but cute in all i liked it
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RuruBugg Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
asdfjkl;....
I think I wanna cry because I wanna read more! 
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:iconcakekawaii:
CakeKawaii Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Student General Artist
kawaii i loved it
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Emi-Tanaka Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I really enjoyed the manga and I love the cover art!! Oh, and one question: is the name of the manga "Tale of the Precious School" or something like that?
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B0RN-T0-DIE Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
the name is 

school tails ^^
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Emi-Tanaka Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Kewl! <D Hope I can come up with a manga name as good as that! (I seriously suck with original titles and setting names ^^')
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ysane Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
this is really good omg i love it really good
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XxGhostlyGhoulxX Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Student General Artist
I...LOVE IT,Llama Emoji 23 (Shyness) [V1]  it's amazing !! Love Love Llama Emoji 03 (Sparkles) [V1]  Is there a Part 2??
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facadepapergirl Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2013   General Artist
I would suggest something like Manga Studio, so that you can do tones for the furniture, walls and such. I don't blame you for doing without, though. Something as extensive as a manga requires a lot of work; Even professional manga artists don't do their own screentones; they have assistants for that. I would leave it flat like that and do the tones at my own convinience.

The manga overall, however, is wonderful, and I want to see the next chapter. I'm hoping that she'll gather the courage to talk to people - especially the mouse girl - and somehow show her teacher that she didn't mean to be so mean to her - though she doesn't seem the type to make an actual apology. I'll be looking forward to seeing more of you!
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Lipanel Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013

Nice, she kinda looks like Yuuka from Onigashima

 

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FoxGirlLisa Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2013  Student Artist
ADORABLE! btw Please please please help me with a dress design? its on my page, please help me! >u<~, just read ur manga, its AMAZING!! I WANNA READ MORE!!
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Twiddis Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Ari is so aughuaerngurghrufkckccuute! She's like a littler version of Taiga.
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Elfuuun Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Hobbyist
I really enjoyed it! this story is pretty cool^^
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JoJoBania Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013
Awesome job! I really enjoyed it :icongawwplz:
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SparklyCrystal Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh My gosh! Ari is sooo cute! Anyway, hope to see more of this and I hope you'll reach your dreams of becoming a manga artist!
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iistrawberryiix Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2013
Oh nvm i found it out Lol
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iistrawberryiix Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2013
I'm trying to change the page but its only the cover how to i change the page???
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hanliebanana Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This was awesome please make another!!!!!
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:iconpartidodeladesgracia:
Oye hermano, me gusta lo que hiciste, eres muy talentoso para el dibujo. Nomas que me fije que el dialogo tiene unos detalles menores ya traducido al ingles. Si alguna vez necesitas una revision, nomas echame un grito
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MonsturNao Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Student Artist
Do you do point commissions? Cause I know you don't do requests..
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:iconb0rn-t0-die:
B0RN-T0-DIE Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
sorry. only real money^^
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:iconmonsturnao:
MonsturNao Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Student Artist
Well points,can buy real things on deviantart,but that's fine,Do you use sai?
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:iconb0rn-t0-die:
B0RN-T0-DIE Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
sure do
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ruw50 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013
i loved it
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EVILMEL0N Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Looking forward to next chapter! How do you make a page with the next/previous select?
Sorry for the lack of English...
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:iconmacbravo:
Macbravo Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
damn cute XD im looking forward to it!
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:iconnakime:
Nakime Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012
freakin epic!!
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X-XMattX-X Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Student General Artist
esta genial ^^ te a salido muy guayy
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luv it!!!
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HatsuneSakura Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
AWWW. I LOVE IT. Question, is this like a Manga maker? Like, I know you did your own dialogue, and your own drawings, but I mean how did you make the squares for the scenes come up?
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ramonadyczewska Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2012
Very nice art, I like theese shoes so much ^^
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Fuswaah Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
I love the story and art so much
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Death-Note-Devil Featured By Owner May 30, 2012
I hope someday you will become a manga artist (like a famous one) So you could prinnt this into a real manga and put it on sale Cause i love this <3
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Kaori-chan13 Featured By Owner May 25, 2012
This has got to be one of the greatest deviantART mangas I have ever scene. It was very well drawn and the story plot was also very good. I may not be psyche, but it doesn't take one to see that you've got a big future as a manga artist.
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Minidupont Featured By Owner May 7, 2012
Beautiful :D !!!!
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DarkAkito Featured By Owner May 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
If this was in stores, I would totally buy this. It looks professionally done and looks like something you'd find in a store! Please continue this!
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kopradya Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2012
The story line is real nice :la:
But I think the characters are a bit...empty
I mean, they are very well drawn
but if you look at a jap. manga, there is toning on the hair and clothes, even slightly in the background.
I believe you only add toning to suppress effects of the aura in mood scenes.
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basically i am suggesting more shading
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other than that, i liked the drawings a lot! :happybounce:
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KemikLy Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2012  Professional General Artist
This is very well-done! Makes me wanna read more! ;D
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B0RN-T0-DIE Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
great^^
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KemikLy Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2012  Professional General Artist
=)
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Father-J Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012
Fun. I'm interested, Though I tend to prefer manga being read in the direction of the writers first language, as opposed to flipping or trying to format them in a direction that doesn't suit the language.
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SOLIDShift Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I was gonna say something good here
but by the very last page I just wanted to know you.
Uhg.. I'm so weird to say that. Prolly doesn't even make sense. /)x A x;(\
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B0RN-T0-DIE Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
know me? haha sure no problem^^
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:iconsolidshift:
SOLIDShift Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes. Your are just a chill kool guy. Heh. ^ ^;

Also I'm just amazed at anyone
who can do better then I in Manga Studio.
That program kicks my butt and strongly
dislikes my tablet.. XD
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B0RN-T0-DIE Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
well i drew on photoshop no manmgastudio but thanx^^
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SOLIDShift Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha Either way you are king. X3
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B0RN-T0-DIE Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
haha ok^^
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SilenceBR Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Perfect! nice work xD
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